Not long before,I fired my boss and began to lead my leisurely life at home again.（这句话是追述过去的事情,因此必须用过去时.）

需要一个过渡句与下文自然衔接:But it doesn’t matter,for it is just what I hope for (或者it fits in exactly with my wishes).

From then on,I am never up late; or rather I can't lie-in at all.No matter whether I go to bed after twelve o’clock or not,it is always about seven o’clock the next day though I stay lazily in bed after waking up.How puzzled it is.It is all the same even if it is getting cold.

(1.第一句话缺动词,睡懒觉的表达不对.2.because 和 no matter是两个性质不同的连词,何况两个连词不能重复使用；no matter 后必须要有 wh-连接词.3.其他错误较多,不再一一指出,请自己对比.4.有的地方属于修辞问题,也作了必要的修改.)

After getting up,to make myself refreshed,I get used to going downstairs for some warm water to drink in spite of spring,summer,autumn or winter.I think it helpful to clean my viscera to keep me healthy.

I am usually reading a book until 8 o’clock and then I will be downstairs to cook breakfast.Before going down,I have had my washing machine running.After breakfast,I accompany my mum till nine o'clock and then go up again to study upstairs.

Super is at half past eleven.

It is time to go to the food market for some vegetables at half past four in the afternoon.However,I have to wash rice clean and put it into the electric cooker before leaving so as to make meals as soon as I come back.

Sitting in the room for a while,I generally go out for a walk after dinner along the habitual way.Commonly,I get back from the walk at eight.

On coming back,I usually go up into my room to log on internet.Going downstairs for bath is what I frequently do when the clock strikes nine.At first,I must help Mum swab down all over and then it is my turn.Sometimes,when there is an interesting teleplay,Mum insists that I take bath first.Having bathing ourselves,it is nearly ten o’clock.After I serve my mother a cup of warm water,I take her dirty clothes upstairs for the washer is up there.

Lying in bed,I am used to read some leaves of book.Not until do I turn off the light until I cannot keep my eyes open.

When I sometimes see the floor dirty,I’d like to do cleaning after get up.I gave a thorough cleaning to the house from eight in the morning to twelve at noon the other day.All the trucks and mess,big and small,was cleaned up.I felt tired with ache when I was lying in bed.As I saw the rooms clean and tidy,however I think what I had done was worth it.(大扫除追述的是过去的事情,要用过去时态.)

My everyday life seems to be boring and humdrum,yet I feel all the time that the sensation staying at home is best of all.Of course,I have now been conserving strength and storing up energy rather than staying at home idly.I am studying hard now while waiting for a good chance.As soon as the opportunity is coming,I will be ready to make my dream come true.I believe it is not far from me.

错误较多,主要存在于以下几个方面：

一、用现在时态描述日常一天的生活是对的,但是一旦涉及追述过去,就得用过去时去表述；同时,个别地方使用现在进行时和现在完成时也是必要的.

二、许多地方用词不当,如：downstairs 和 upstairs 是副词或形容词,不能用作介词宾语（before downstairs）或谓语动词（I usually upstairs to play）.

三、很多句子不通顺.因为太多,不好一一指出,所以只好文章中作了较大的修改,供你对照检查.