Is Writing a Pleasure or Torture?
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First, the first paragraph should be deleted. It is useless to prove your ideas.

Second, readers would love to find examples in your essay. And you did so (the 2nd paragraph). Illustrations always attract people's eyes. So, if you could make it more explicit, the example will be perfect.

This essay has clear ideas and a great discussion. So, I suggest that in your conclusion you should repeart your opinion which is writting is a great benefit for the people who love to write and it never torture them at all.

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