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He is one of the most influential figures in china,(and)is also one of the most famous Chinese athlete in the world
这一句两个单句之间加个and比较好,
Yao Ming this is the motto,is my motto.这一句应该改为
This is Yao Ming‘s motto,and is also my motto.
其他的都挺好
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