求改雅思作文TASK 2处女作最好说一下分数QuestionStudents from rural areas ofte
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...几乎都是病句和逻辑错误
第一句：这个观点没有佐证,而且很容易就被人反驳,谁说students in rural areas就一定work harder than that in urban areas?
第二局：入学不是get an admission,而是get an offer
第一段最后一句：什么叫unsatisfied situation?不满意的状况?
第二段：
disparity还不如gap
后面那句undergraduates in .把achieve换了,然后这句话你表达的意思不是很清楚
transform是变形的意思,这里不合适
On the other hand, there are hosts of celebrities who were born in rural areas, which indicates that it is insensible of people living in cities to underestimate those born in country sides你的意思是城市人其实农村人,不过看起来实在费劲.
very needs of the society是错误的表达方式
their peers in countryside as enemies这里表达太强烈.不妥
倒二段的意义不是特别清楚
对于你问题补充,其实词汇倒不是关键,重点是逻辑一定要清楚.你想想我们学中文作文的时候是先学词汇还是先学逻辑你就明白了
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