LZ,您好!
经过我们年级组的商量,给出的建议是:
行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;多多加强从句和复杂句的使用;文章词汇表达多样性要提高,单词拼写方面还要继续努力;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开.
接下来点评文章:
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Li Hua , who is a panda lover.
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查
I have paid close attenion
to about website three years, and I known the just born parda Sulin and her
mother White Cloud.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[词语错误] 词性错误,I known不规范,建议修改.
[拼写错误] attenion
拼写错误,可替换选项为:attention, attuning, attaining
[拼写错误] parda 拼写错误,可替换选项为:pad, payday,
purdah
[低频提示] her mother white cloud
无此用法,疑似中式英语
First of all, happy brith to Sulin.
[拼写错误] brith 拼写错误,可替换选项为:broth, birth, breath
Then, thank of about worker look after them.
[低频提示] about worker look
无此用法,疑似中式英语
[低频提示] about worker look after them
无此用法,疑似中式英语
Finally, I wanted Sulin three years old brithday photos.
[拼写错误] brithday 拼写错误,可替换选项为:birthday, Brita, Britta
I do hope them happy life.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[名词错误] happy life 前面冠词缺失
[词语错误]
用词不当,建议将hope改为wish. wish可以加双宾语,hope不可以加双宾语. [低频提示] i do hope them 无此用法,疑似中式英语
Li Hua
[句子错误] 句子不完整
本回答均为原创,未经允许,禁止转载!