雅思作文求批改 尤其是开头和结尾 谢啦~
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有几个连接词用得不对吧,拼写也有错误.

“individuals will surely not endeavor to harm the environment.By contrast,he will try every means to protect the environment.”

The behavior of individuals plays a significant role in environment protecting as well.

.还有你的句子好碎,有的完全可以复合在一起的.

不过语言准确性还算不错,逻辑也算得上清晰.应该是7分左右的文章吧.