请改改语法这篇文章是我的英语作文,求大侠帮我改改 - 已解决

请改改语法这篇文章是我的英语作文,求大侠帮我改改.

my name is ..,i`m from Zigong city of Sichuan province,i was graduated from zigong NO.14 Vocational High school in 2009.my major is electronic.

i`m a outgoing girl,i like learning new things,i`m good at Chinese,but English is not good.my hobbies are listening to music.play game and swimming.But i can`t swim,i`m learing to swim.i don`t have much time for my hobbies,Work makes me feel busy and tired.

waiter was my first job,secoud was a office girl,the third was a sales girl.But i`m a mould engineer now,i love this job ,because let me full my life and happy.

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electronic 是形容词这里应该改为 electronics 名词电子学

a outgoing ----an outgoing

play game--playing games

work--working

waiter--waitress

second 拼写有误

a office--an office

最后一句话完全不对可改为 because it makes my life fruitful and happy

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