第一句话是对的吧,就是不知道你的efficiency指的啥子内容.
第二句that后面就背绕昏了,advance应该用原形.建议改为:Invariably do we admire those greatly talented people who have made significant contributions to the world like Bill Gates for advancing the IT field.
第三句的倒装有点问题,楼主可能想用only by/in which (way) can sb do sth
Only by combining them of which we take advantage can we make influence on our personality and development during our life process.