一篇英语小作文,麻烦请大家看看有没有语法错~

一篇英语小作文,麻烦请大家看看有没有语法错~

才写的,我们英语作文是算考试成绩的,所以大家帮忙看看有没有错误~有错的麻烦在不改变原句意思的情况下帮我修改下~

Dear Ben

Thank you very much for your letter.I hope I can offer you some useful suggestions.

You said you feel stressed with schoolwork and you have a lot of homework to do so you hardly have any spare time for your hobbies.It will be a good choise to make a list of all the homework you have to do.Then work out how much time you need to complete it all.This will give you an idea of how much free time you have so that you can have some time do relax.

It seems that you often quarrel with you parents.You need to chat with them and get help from them.The best way is to let your parents see you progress.

You said you are afraid of being laughed at when you don't do well in study.Please pay no attention to those students who laugh at you and be proud of your schoolwork.

I hope my advice is worth taking.

Best wishes.

Your friend

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我发现的问题如下：

1. 你的从句的时态跟你主句的时态是不一致的.

2. 不是 choise,而是 choice

3. 我觉得那句 how much time you need to complete it all 改成：how long you need to complete them all 比较好.

4. so that you can have some time do relax 应该是 to relax.

5. 落款应该是 yours,

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