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I like a girl who is slim and not very tall .her height is around 165cm (人的身高不用height描述,此处可两句话合并:I love a girl who is slim and 165cm tall,which is not satisfying in my mind.句型描述上比较流畅).she has long hair.she has big eyes .and has soft skin on her face .(此处也可合并并且完善句型:She is always so beautiful in my heart,with long hair,big eyes and soft skin on her face.) she always enjoy wearing (enjoys to wear,表示一种日常状态更好) blue jeans ,sport shoes and coats in red .I don't need(I don't require that) she is a good cook.because I am good at cooking.( 此处用that引导的从句效果更好,且用词错误需要改正:I don't require that she is good at cooking,which is what I'm good at.) I can make chinese food which including is chuan dishes ,dongbei dishes and shanxi dishes ,and western food is all I can do .(I can cook Chinese food such as chuan dishes ,dongbei dishes and shanxi dishes well and western food as well ) I will spending the time to (spend time on doing sth) accompany her .Because she is very important to me for my whole life .and after we got married .I will beside her (陪在在某人身边:I will always be by her side) except working .I would make three meals a day for her ,I would wash clothes for her ,she will be the happiest wife in the world .I would teach our baby Chinese and English .I will take him to go abroad for studying more .he will be a great man when he grows up .he would marry (be married by) a nice girl to be his wife .I think my son will be great in his future life.

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