大前提,我猜你是翻译的吧!文章怪怪的,而且现在是formal letter,不可以缩写

1.I was graduate from National University of Singapore 3 years ago.

→graduate is verb/noun

if verb,here is passive voice(be+v.+ed)

noun is 毕业生

so,here cross out was

2.1 mouth ago

→a month ago(need 冠词)

3.Because the company is not very well.

→不够清晰

maybe you can say"That company is not suitable for me."

4.So I give my boss my letter of resign and leave the company

→"my letter" a letter

5.I have to display much interest in your company and the job.So I write a CV for you .

→可更简洁

I was interested in it,so I write this letter for you.

6.I'm a man

→有点多余

7.My hometown is China and I was living in Singapore 10 years.

→你是现在也住在新加坡

Although I am a Chinese,I have lived in Singapore for 10 years.

8.So I have a preferable English base.

→太口语化

So my English skill is capable enough.

9.My subject is Hospitality and Tourism.

→Change is into are

10.You know National University of Singapore is a famous university in Singapore and world.So I have a preferable basic knowledge.

→不用,现在你是求职,不是寸人

11.I have 3 years working experience.

→My working experience is abundant.I have worked for a company for 3 years.

12.In despite this company not very big.But in this company I was act I assume that the management work.

→"In despite"is followed by noun

Although this company is not very famous,I learn a lot of skills.For instance,problem skills,how to lead people and so on.

13.And a majority of staff consider my work is good.So I have preferable working experience.In Singapore 10 years.My parents,friends,teacher and boss consider me is a honest,make progress,business like and optimism man.

→Most of my colleagues think that I have good ability,all of them said that I was a honest ,clever and optimistic man.

14.I think this advantage is helps a lot of work.But I still have some disadvasntage,like sometimes lazy and do not care.But I think this disadvantages can correction.I will do my best to correction them.

I find out Dynasty Tours Pte Ltd is a good and big company.It have 20 years history.The headquarter in Singapore.Now the company have 4 branch companies and have above 2000 staff.It's a with the strength of the company.

I want come into the company long time.And I know,many talents want come into the company.Maybe I'm not the best one.But if I can induction,I will do my best to work.

→不用,太口语化,而且经理对公司的知识多过你,只为了足够字数

你可说说为何选择这份工作

15.I do not ask for much on salaries.I hope get 22000 dollars one year.If I can get some company benefits,It's the best.

My thlephone number 98276482.Look forward to your calls.

Thanks for reading.

→像讲条件般

I am content for the salary and walfare.I hope you can give me an opportunity to contribute to your company.You can contact me at 98276482.I am looking forward for your calling.

16.下款

→不知那人的名字

Your sincerely

你的签名

Henry