第三行 my mother is a white collar,and she is very beautiful.
第四行:he is not only very handsome ,but very stable
第五行改为 It is very hard for them to take care of me
第七行改为sometimes we go swimming together,after swimming,we go to the park to have fun.
倒数第二行末尾加个together
这样会比较通顺且没有语法错误
有问题欢迎追问.